i know they could use alot of work, and there are three more chapters to be added, plus the edited prologue, and chapters 3-8. i've been writing this story for about ever 9 months now, and i currently havent been writing much because i'm in this science research program, but things should get lighter, so i hope to write more soon.
Chapter 3 The Dream
As we headed upstairs, Seth had a pensive look on his face, so I left him alone . We walked into my room . Black and dark purple walls covered with posters of bands, such as HIM, Avenged Sevenfold, Paramore, Breaking Benjamin, and hendreds more . Various peopole such as Don Henrie and Ellen Schriber covered the walls as well . I walked into my closet to change into a happy bunny T – shirt and black shorts and drew the curtains sruond my bed . Seth, who was on the floor said good morning and so did I and we fell asleep . But for me, it was a long fitful sleep yet again .
I dreampt of a distant past . Somehow I knew this to be true. Somehow I knew this was a part of my life . The problem is I don't remember living through it during my 613 years of life . I was walking in an forrest, captivated by its beauty . A stranger walked up to me and gave me a parchment envelope . I was about to open it but my dream drifted off somewhere else . I t drifted off to a giant gothic style castle in the middle of a forrest . I'm guessing that it was the middle of the forrest that I was walking through . I saw a crowd of people and they were dressed as if they were from the Middle ages . There were the usual tapestries the castle looked huge. Form what I could see the staircase was made of marble and pink granite . Truly beautiful .
Chapter 2 : Night At The Eclypse
We walked up to the silver and gold doors. There were two tall guards at the door to collect money .
“ Two dollars please . ”
“ For the one of the hottest nightclubs on the LI it is really cheap . “Seth said .
“ Yeah . “ I replied
As we walked into the club, we breathed in the energy of everyone around us . We felt somewhat of a natural high . As we walked around with a feling of great elation, we noticed that the Evanescence song, Good Enough, was being played . “ Under your spell again. I can't say no to you . Crave my heart, and it's bleeding in your hand . I can't say no to you . . . “
I drifted into my own thoughts . Thoughts of not being so lonely and feeling like I am alone, and having no one to love and no one to love me .
“ And I'm still waiting for the rain to fall . Pour real life down on me . Cuz I can't hold on to anything this good enough . Am I good enough for you to love me too ? So take care of what you ask of me, Cuz I can't say no to you .”
“ Dreaming again ? You have a glazed look in your eyes .”
“ Yeah . I'm fine . Just dreaming of what could be . . . “ But, knowing that my crazy dreamings could never be, I listened to the next song, Which was by HIM. “ I did it all, just for her . I did it all just for her . And love's heart is dead for me and my Poison Girl . ”
We stood there by the bar for a few songs, occasionally taking sips from our drinks . As the night wore on, we began to socialize with others . We clilled and talked about random things . That was the usual for us .
“ So, why do you resist your instincts, your impulses ? You constantly do this all the time. You deny to embrace who you are . ” Seth said .
“ I don't resist my impulses al the time . I am now though . Do you prefer me to stand here or to jump you and rip your heartout of your chest hmm ? I don't not want to embrace who I am . I've always embraced wh I am . I've been alive for centuries, so I've had time to assimilate . I don't want to become dependent on blood, no matter how good it tastes. Remember when that happened ? Remember how many people I killed . I left not an ounce of blood in their bodies . Do you wish to see a repeat of the past ? And, technically, I don't resist it . I go to clubs to party, meet people, and to feed off of the energy that they release . That is the most efficient way for me to feed, anyway . I have tried blood before and I liked it. ( I admitted that with a shiver down my spine, remembering the horrible deeds I've done ) . But I like energy better, I don't know why . ” I replied heatedly with annoyance, as he has asked me this question a cople times this month .
It was finally 6:00 AM. Seth cannot go out in sunlight for too long, nor can I , so we headed home . As we pulled up to the gates to my house, the sun was peaking over the horizon .
“ I'm going to sleep at your house . “
“ And when did we agree to this ? “
“ Well, being that I'm 1 year your superior, I'll do what I want at your house . In this caseit's to sleep there . You wouldn't want me to die, would you Gwen ? “
“ Actually, Seth, I wouldn't mind that so much . ”
“ Your so cold Gwen . I'm going to cry . “
Of course he was just joking .
“ I know. Sometimes only the cold or seemingly cold survive . “
“ Yeah. But deep down, and I mean Way deep down, you care. That is oddly comforting . ”
Actually, it was below the surface . You just had to look for it .
We got out of the car and walked through the massive mohogany doors just as the sun was fullt above the horizon .
Chapter 1 The Eclypse
It's 4:31 and the sun's going down . I woke up slightly earlier than I was supposed to, so I got to see part of the sunset .
“ It looks beautiful, even though it is half over . It's been years since I've seen the sun set . . .
I stepped out of my bed and pulled back the shades. Nighttime is coming.
I was thirsty, so I went to the refrigerator .
“Trying in vainly to resist the urge again” Seth said .
Seth is tall, about 6'5. Long jet black hair usually with dye at the ends, whatever his choice was . Tonight it was a shade of shocking blue . He had on a long black trench coat with HIM / Bam Margera's logo on the back, a red shirt and black baggy pants . He was one of the select few that I trusted .
“ SO, how was your sleep ? ”
“ Fitful and restless, as usual . What about you ? ”
“ Not fitful, but restless. To take your mind off of things, lets go to The Eclipse. I hear that they are only playing HIM and Evanescence all nigt . ”
Well, now I was dead – set on going . HIM and Evanescence are some of the greatest bands of all time, alongside Arch Enemy, Atreyu, Black Sabbath, Iced Earth, Iron Maiden, Judas Preist, AFI, and Lamb Of God just to name a few . Anyone could just up - and - walk into The Eclipse, but if they were getting strange looks they would often turn back .
I stepped into my room in my house . Im 613 but I look like in 13 in human years .
I was wondering what to wear . The Nightmare Before Christmas shirt, maybe ? No It just didn't seem right to night . I geuss a black Heavy Red corset with blood – red trim would do with a black skirt .
“Hurry up, they start playing Evanescence in 30 minutes .”
I put on a pair of Electra 2037 boots . I put Manic Panic Infrared dye in my hair to complete my outfit .
“ Get your slow lazy tail down here or I'm leaving without you !!! “
“ Wait a minute you impatient zealot !!! “
Geez. He can be so impatient sometimes .
20 minutes later we were in the car headed to The Eclipse . The Eclipse is one of the hotest nightclubs on Long Island . It was located in the Suffok
County area of Long Island . It was in an abandoned Gothic – Elizebethian style house, coverd in Ivy and moss, next to a huge ancient graveyard .
“ Just my kind of place .”
Prologue
“Get them out of here quickly, while the sun's still up!”, a man screamed as I walked calmly ever closer to him. I had a blood lust that I could not ignore. I felt the sun stinging my exposed face, but I didn't care. As I walked closer to the man, he took slow elusive steps backwards until he fell. I bent over him, and bit into his neck. His blood was gushing over me slightly and I didn't care. When I was done with him, I moved onto the next. I walked up to them silently from behind and bit them and drained them as well, their blood so sweet on my lips. It tasted as sweet as honey. I wreaked havoc on this village as if the devil himself were here. I was sustained,so I walked out of the village, and turned around to look back. Houses were alight with fire, and people are running about like scared dogs. “Havoc. Confusion. I love this.” I let out a blood – curling laugh and sauntered away, taking my time to hear the anguished screams and cries of the villagers.
i've rewritten this, i just wanted some feedback on this one. Thank You
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