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curioser and courioser....I love it!!

i like your poetry very much...

it's so deep..

Most obliged, ladies!

This poem is reminiscent of an encounter with... someone who has been violated...



The imagery is clear but the power of it appears to take the general form of a bell curve representing sleep. The build up at the beginning is slow. The imagery there seems a little disinterested. Almost as if the whole event seems a little benign (nothing out of the ordinary?) to the writer's subjective view.



The apex of which is in the lines:



"in feverish dreams

in feverish dreams"



I say this because of the simple repetition of the line. The act of this gives a subtle yet 3 dimensional quality of tossing and turning in a restless and disturbed manner.



From either side of these lines, the imagery has less power. But it does not necessarily degrade the poem. In the lines:



"to silently swallow

the sweet fruits of life

bitter fruits of understanding

remained after the hasty run of thieves"



It feels like a build up, with the last line "remained after the hasty run of thieves" as someone who has found the image that was being sought after. Like a a person who finally is able to say what is at the tip of his tongue.



With the final four lines:



"over those felt asleep

under the olive crosses

under the olive crosses

over those felt asleep"



The imagery seems to fall flat as if the person is acquiescing to what cannot be undone but is still dreaming. The dreaming state being the repetition of the line "under the olive crosses" like that of the apex of the poem.



The title, itself, easily appears to support all this. The serpent is at once a methodical actor and a quick violator, wasting no time with the superfluous. It's status as a mythical figure found in multiple legends throughout various cultures would also imbue the serpent with a dream-like quality; mysterious and and evoking curiosity. Even it's own body could be, conceivably, seen as a representation of a single course that cannot be deviated from.



Thank you for sharing your poetry!

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is rarely seen such a deep insight of a poem!

Thank you, Philosopher for taking the time and deciphering one of my most encrypted poems!However, not all of the symbols of the poetry was observed here. My poems are in the same time polysemantic and hermetic.

You are quite a reader!

this is my fav its beautiful