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winters chill is upon us as snow gently falls. the wind roars its spell mountains of snow cold and wet create a beautiful scene wrapped in warm blankets i watch as snow continues to fall i now know winters chill is here

as i lie in bed waiting for the sun to set i wonder why. Why must the sun rise, why does the water flow why. I lie on my bed and wonder why.

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ConSpirito
16:51 Nov 15 2008

It's good, but is a bit vague. Though, you can change it's structure to something with a "faster beat" and it becomes more... not sure what the word is I'm looking for right now. Just woke up. XD But still, it's good.

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Tall, dark, and handsome he stands posed, waiting for his queen to return to him. As he waits, he watches over his relm of darkness and love. As his queen returns, he gathers the draknessto cover themin a cocoon. He commands the darkness to settle on her body to form a dress of black silkand lace. As they embrace, two blck elven crowns appears on their heads, as he becomes king and she the queen of Darkness

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ConSpirito
19:21 Nov 14 2008

While this is written in "para-form", I found myself reading it over and over for various forms and found that this "para-form" was actually at the top of the list with maybe 2 other forms before it. I liked this one a lot. Good job.

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KingOfDarkness
04:40 Nov 29 2008

Awesome Poem. Reminds me of myself and one of my ex's.

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Her heart is filled with loneliness.

It has made her heart heavy,as if the world was crashing down on her heart.

Is there anyone who is willing to comfort her?

Save her from the jaws of loneliness?

No. No one has yet, come forthto save her from it. She feels,if no one saves her soon, she feels this loneliness will last forever.

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ConSpirito
06:33 Nov 14 2008

I enjoyed it. Even though it is dark and gloomy, but it still has it's own tact, and that's great.

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