Start of draft05:43 May 23 2010
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This is a very basic, unedited, version of a story I've started. Grammar will be very, very BAD. But if you have any constructive criticism, please let me know.
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“How did you find me? How do you know who I am?” I started to back away, I was afraid he was going to attack me.
“I’m very good at finding people is all, little pup”
“W-What did you call me?”
“’Little pup’, isn’t that what your dear mother called you?”
I froze, petrified. He knew what my mom called me. How?! She and dad have been dead for twelve years. I searched though my mind, trying to think. Maybe I’d seen him before… Maybe he and mom were friends at some point.
“You knew my mom?” I didn’t let down my guard as I spoke. For all I know, he could be some sort of creepy stalker that watched my mom 24/7 or something.
“Your mom and I were very close… Until she met that animal you call your father.” His eyes were full of rage when he said that.
“Look, maybe you haven’t heard, but my parents are both dead.” I took a half-step back.
“Don’t run little pup, I’m not looking for your mother and I don’t want to have to cause you harm.”
He’s lying. I know he’s lying. Something about him just doesn’t feel right…
Alright, I need a plan to get out of here. Suppose I could just make a run for and hope he doesn’t catch me.
“I don’t know who you are…”
I gripped the strap of my bag tightly.
“And I don’t know what you want with me or my parents”
I tensed my legs, getting ready to make a break for it.
“And I don’t care!”
I start running, in no real direction, for all I know I was going in a big circle. Not too likely, though, I was trying to go as straight as I could. Dodging trees and jumping over stumps and rocks.
“You demon! Get back here!” I could hear him gaining speed and was terrified he was going to grab me and kill me.
I tried to speed up, but was starting t o feel the muscles in my legs burn and I was beginning to slow down. In my mind, I was trying to envision what would happen if he caught me. Would he kill me? Or kidnap me or rape me?
My thoughts were interrupted by the howling of wolves and I stopped dead in my tracks. If only I could change! But I still haven’t gone through my first transformation… Maybe I didn’t get the gene after all.
The man had caught up to me and was only feet away when there was a cracking of twigs and crunching of leaves near us. A large, black wolf emerged from the trees and was growling ferociously.
The man looked like he was about to piss himself; it made me feel a little bit better.
“M-Mongrel!” He yelled as he started to back away. “Get away from me!”
The wolf started toward the man and it looked like it was going to attack him and even attack me.
My eyes met the creatures and I was shocked at what I saw; the wolf had the most striking green eyes I’d ever seen and they reminded me of my father’s.
The wolf stood in front of me, as if it were defending or protecting me. It growled and met eyes with the man, looking like he was going to lunge.
“I’ll be back for you Tabitha! I swear!” At that, he turned and ran away at full speed. It almost looked as if he had a wet spot on the back of his pants.
“T-Thank you,” I muttered to the wolf and start to turn around and head out of the forest.
“Tabitha.”
I turned around and there was no longer a wolf starting there, but man. His hair was the same black as the wolf’s fur and his eyes looked exactly the same. Oh yea, and he was butt-ass naked.
“Tabitha, I thought I’d never get to meet you. I'm Daroc.” He took a step toward me and offered his hand.
I would have taken it, but I was still getting over the fact that there was a nude man in front of me that, not only knew my name, but only moments before had been a wolf.
“You’re… You’re kinda really naked…”
He looked down at himself and laughed, “Indeed I am. I’m sorry, are your eyes still that innocent?”
I nodded. “You’re a werewolf.”
“Again, indeed I am. I know you wouldn’t have had to change and leave your bag, but I’m sure it would’ve been safe for a while. You at least could’ve gotten away from that guy.” He took a seat on the ground and patted the leaves beside him.
“I-I haven’t been through my first change yet,” I mumbled as I sat beside him. I was so nervous that I couldn’t get the courage to look him in the eyes.
“You… Wait, how old are you? You must have by now!”
I glanced up and he looked shocked. Almost worried.
“I’m s-seventeen”
He got up and pulled me to my feet. “Follow me. Now.”
His tone told me that I really didn’t have any choice, so I let him drag me along.
The further we went into the forest, the darker it got. Hell, I couldn’t even know that the woods in this area were this big. It felt like I would never find my way out if I ever wanted to escape wherever he was taking me. I’ll admit that it was beautiful, especially the way the sunlight danced through the trees and hardly half of the rays made their way to the ground.
Daroc stopped and I walked straight into him.
“Gah! Watch it!” It felt like he was glaring at me a little. “Stay here and don’t move. I’ll be right back.” With that her turned into a large black wolf and padded forward.
“Great…” I mumbled and plopped myself onto the ground. “Not like it wasn’t enough when I had a creep-o following me, but now I have a wolf-man-thing trying to get me lost in the middle of nowhere…”
After several more minutes of mumbling and grumbling, I realized something; it was silent. Completely silent. The birds stopped chirping, the leaves stopped moving… It was really creepy.
Finally, wolf-Daroc came back and transformed into a human before me.
“Alright, the pack is willing to let you stay with us if you won’t, just… Don’t be surprised if they act a little… Odd, I guess is the right word.” He didn’t move after he finished speaking, just waited for a response.
I took a step forward as my answer to him.
“What kind of ‘odd’ do you mean exactly?”
He started walking and I followed.
“It’s very likely that people, though maybe not in that form, will sniff you. A lot.”
Confused, I followed him closely as we continued into the forest, but the trees stared to thin and it became much easier for the light rays to make it to the ground. It was definitely bright compared to the darkness we’d been walking through for so long. Soon I began to see tents, a couple small and one huge one.
“These tents house our guards. They’re the one that alert the rest of the pack if humans get too close.” It was creepy the way it seemed like he was reading my mind.
“How often does that happen?”I started to notice couple of people leaning against trees and talking. There was even one person sitting naked in a tree and reading.
“Not too often.” Daroc started leading me toward a large fire. “But enough so that we have to move to a new place every week or so.”
“Oh… That must suck sometimes…”
“Not actually,” A new voice from behind me said.
I jumped, stifling a shriek, but still managed to trip over a large root. Before I could hit the ground, someone caught me. The man, though he hardly looked old enough to be called one, smiled warmly at me with dull green eyes that almost mirrored Daroc’s.
COMMENTS
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Maell
06:17 May 23 2010
I really enjoyed this. It's fresh and kept me interested. Let me know when you have more...I'd like to continue the read.
FeverDreams
07:38 May 23 2010
... lol ... loved it angel!
I love the funny bits .... esp ... “You’re… You’re kinda really naked…”
I like the fact that you are narrating the story. Awesome!
fantasygirl904
02:36 May 25 2010
this is great can't wait for more a few grammar errors here and there but other than that really great. your a really good writer from what i can tell.
DarkCowboy
03:30 Jun 03 2010
very good work! keep writing!