don't laugh this is my first ever poem.
HE IS NO MORE
There he sits,
Alone and cold,
No one to turn to,
No one to help.
All he has,
Is his blade.
He takes his blade,
And puts it to his wrist,
And without any thought,
He cuts a line,
down his arm.
He sits there,
Watching it bleed.
Then he faints,
His heart stops,
He has no pulse.
there he lies
Dead,
Alone,
He is no more
COMMENTS
*sighs* i invite3 u to look at my profile.. i like ur style of writing..real baby, ur very raw and real which i like
i felt the same and almost did the same i have a fetish with big knives.love the poem?!
To death do us part
Here I am ,
Alone again,
No one here,
To turn to.
Im by myself,
Ive bought it,
Upon myself,
Its my entire fault.
I have lost all,
My family,
My friends,
The ones I love.
But just at that moment,
She comes out,
Of the mist,
And she holds me.
She says.
Youll never lose me,
Im here till the end,
To death do us part.
I look at her,
And I say.
Thank you,
Ill be here for you.
I lay there,
With her,
And I think,
Theres always someone.
COMMENTS
awww I love it you have a very deep and beautiful soul :)
i like this poem even if it is your first time goodjob.
They are all good, but this one's my favorite...
Its wonderful milord *smiles softly*...
Wondering piece, I can see it may relate to the love of another, the imagery is powerful and the words truly cynical.
Love...
This is what love is...and you put it into words.
It's amazingly accurate.
COMMENTS
-
SeraphimofGrey
15:01 Mar 08 2009
I would never laugh. Posting poetry is posting a part of your soul for the world to see.
MorbidAngels15
23:00 Mar 18 2009
This is really good for a first poem.... :)
aquababy62
02:52 May 31 2009
sweet i love i and think it's life?!
VampyreGurl22
19:44 Aug 02 2009
That's very good for a first poem. I like it at least don't know how much my opinion counts but?
sculptarexdexfrumuse
03:01 Aug 03 2009
Your point is logical. May I ask what was the meaning behind this?
xSweetPeax
21:55 Feb 12 2011
these thoughts are deep, wounds so fresh but so ancient.....the feeling lies dormant
BlackLullaby
12:08 May 25 2012
really nice