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Virgil, you are late.

07:20 Jun 19 2010
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Still sitting on the middle step

Watching the steam rise

From dank New Orleans gutters.

It lifts itself with hands of vapor

And stands,

Thinly,

Regarding me

In exactly the fashion I expect,

Having read every fairy tale,

Every happy ever after

Penned to distract.

Even now,

Laughter and color holiday past,

Hand-in-hand along the walk

Like all good stories.

Yet we are all that is real tonight,

Phantoms

From gutters,

Half-formed screams

Haunting the script

That burns our lips cold

When they deliver the lines.

But we are not fine!

"No," he agrees, "we are not fine."

But this is only the middle step

And now

It's time to go.


COMMENTS

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imagesinwords
imagesinwords
07:26 Jun 19 2010

I can't help but read when I see 'New Orleans'. And because you craft words in such a way... curiosity becomes delight.





Joli
Joli
07:28 Jun 19 2010

Thank you :)





BLOODLIFE
BLOODLIFE
10:45 Jun 19 2010

Wow! Where did that come from?

You have never failed to deliver great work. I wish I could peep into your mind.

You simply know how to evoke one's imagination.





borked
borked
13:34 Jun 19 2010

I found the reference to the middle step.





The angel's feet are planted on the top step, which is bright red (like blood); the middle step is cracked and dark in color; the bottom step is made of white marble, so pure that it reflects images. The steps, from bottom to top, appear to represent three stages of penance: recognition of one's sins, heartfelt contrition, and satisfaction.





That is a beautiful way of saying we have journeyed from the white marble, to the cracked second step. And we are that bit closer to the Angel.





Joli
Joli
23:44 Jun 19 2010

I'm blown away, borked. I don't usually explain what I'm trying to say because I respect the reader's experience and what they bring to what they read. That you'd even care enough to wonder at the allusions...how can anyone who writes not be jazzed about that? I doubt my feet will touch the floor today. Thank you :)





placidchaos
placidchaos
04:50 Jul 01 2010

Hmm, I like this. It's soothing and reassuring but not in any way I can stick my thumb on and say, "Yep, that's it." I like it.





vampfan2009
vampfan2009
03:29 Jul 16 2010

yep, sounds like all the break ups i've ever cried over. the frustration, the scripted words, the calm after the storm when you think over what you just said and did...








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