Would you notice?07:09 Apr 10 2008
Times Read: 1,630
The world has grown up around me
And I have lost myself in it.
The harder places have been pulled away
And devoured.
What is forever when the body aches
And the mind seeks oblivion?
Oh, but each song the wind sings
Is sweeter than the last.
I die piece by piece across the years
That I wear more deeply each day.
I am the blossom that teases your eye.
I am the shade that comforts your fevered soul.
I am the twig beneath your boot.
I am the dark soil of your rest.
Seek me. Love me. Spit upon me. Know me.
I know you. Be one with me.
We will be many and the wind will sing to us
When the world is pulled away
COMMENTS
-
imagesinwords
21:55 Apr 28 2008
Yeah you right! That even smells like pralines and gumbo. And it feels humid, and perfect.
STABB666
22:33 Apr 28 2008
I absolutely love it. It comes to me as a song. It's wonderful.
I'll read this one over and over again, and again.
captainglobehead
00:15 Apr 29 2008
What very little I know of New Orleans I have learned from your words, through your senses.
Beautiful; beautiful and compelling.
meeper
04:58 Apr 29 2008
Beautiful sensory evocations.
Irony
14:59 Apr 29 2008
I love that first line, very beautiful:)
Vespers
16:26 Apr 29 2008
Wonderfully written - like some else said, feels like a song, could be a song very easily. I love the way the words sort of chase one another, in a musical succesion - almost like a drum beat.
Beautiful.
Joli
20:15 Apr 29 2008
I don't know if you will ever know how dear to me your feedback is. Thank you for reading and taking the time to share your thoughts with me. I'm a rich woman to have such readers and encouraging sentiments :)
Angelus
13:56 May 01 2008
"absolutely-bloody-fantastic!"